Post 12: Script Drafts and Feedback

This is part of one of our first drafts of our script. This particular part is not in the correct format that a script should be in. The scene numbers and descriptions are not correctly allined and the scene needs to be bold and underlined. Also the dialogue needs to be changed slightly, we don't need to repeat Billy's name every time he talks, instead we just need to insert a pause. The dialogue will also need to be justified and allined to the correct margins.


A producer called Becky Knapp, came into our class and discussed each of our scripts with us and gave us feedback on how we needed to improve. She looked at our first draft and told us it would be too short to create our film. We had a page and a half and she told us a script should be a page a minute. She also helped us realise that our story was quite undeveloped, we didn't have a clear beginning, middle or end, there was no journey. This is part of the script which she helped us annotate to improve.